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Going overseas for university study is an exciting prospect for many people. But while it may offer some advantages, it is probably better to stay home because of the difficulties a student inevitably encounters living and studying in a different culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
 21st century, air travel to foreign
countries
 had become affordable to all people and people around many
countries
 are welcoming towards individuals from other
countries
. Despite
this
, many are facing problems and are unable to cope with the culture of the locals especially
students
. I agree with
this
 fact that
students
 who are travelling abroad for educational purposes are facing certain difficulties.
Firstly
, teenagers travelling to foreign
countries
 for studies are unable to make friends with the local adults because of the factors like language and food.
For example
, every year many youths are travelling abroad
such
 as in European state to study in popular universities are often encounters problems with native
students
 and due to
such
 ,
,
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incidents they're discontinuing their colleges.
Moreover
, they become victims of skin colour discrimination.
Hence
, more and more
students
 preferring to do their educational activities at home country.
Secondly
, chances of getting a visa is
also
 a major factor discouraging adults to travel abroad.
For instance
, every year western
countries
 are implementing new laws restricting visas to many
students
. In spite of
this
, a huge number of youngsters are dreaming to study in a foreign nation. The percentage adults of travelling for educational purpose to the foreign state are decreasing gradually every year.
Therefore
, cultural differences proved to be a great impact on
students
. In conclusion, I reiterate that youth are facing difficulties adjusting to the language and cultural differences and
as a
result
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 they prefer to engage in their academic activities in their own country. The government of foreign regions should look into
this
 issue and have to attain some laws to protect foreign
students
 from facing discrimination.
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