The influence of human beings on the world’s ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity. What are the primary causes of loss of bio-diversity ? What solutions can you suggest ?

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we can not refuse that
humans
took a major role in destroying the world's ecosystem which led to
bio-diversity
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biodiversity

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loss and the
extinction
of animals life.
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essay believes the main problem is a misconception of how nature is influenced by
humans
and give a lesson to those little
humans
might be the most viable solution. The reasons why the human become a downside of natural plants and animals is a misunderstanding of food chain conception that people are the most significant part of it. They forced their power to control those innocent living lives. Many harmful acts
such
as hunting or take a reserved animal as a pet, widen greater
extinction
.
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, the illegal hunting tradition in the conservative areas especially in the North-East forest area of Thailand among the wealth.
This
operation caused a harmful
extinction
in rare species
such
as the black panthers and white tigers. The prime solution is to set a correct perspective of human position in the food chain and natural ecosystem. The youngs should be more educated about how important
bio-diversity
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biodiversity

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is and the effect of species' loss. The best place and the easiest method to rise up children's awareness is travelling through the zoo.
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, in some
countries
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they open the zoo up for free to young generation learners groups. There
are
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plenty of interesting information provided in any
forms
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such
as educational boards or realistic models. In conclusion, the larger expansion of
extinction
in certain species life that affected by world's
citizen
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is
never-ending
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issue until these days. The way that
humans
losing control to protect other wild lives might be one of the causes while the main solution might be adding a precise attitude about nature from a young age.
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