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Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Compare to 10 decades ago, the modern world gives us many more advantages in different ways. Obviously, we can see the improvements in lives quality. I totally agree with the statement, and I will analyze my point of view through some fields like communication and
food
 security.
Firstly
, communication becomes easier and cheaper than ever. In 100 years back, when technology was still a new definition, humans wrote letters to their beloved, and it took months for the mails to arrive. Nowadays, internet calls and emails are just a click apart. We can do
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 call to our friends anytime, anywhere we want, with their faces on the screen, even they are a thousand miles away.
Secondly
, agriculture is now more productive in quality, quantity, and variety. Take the example in the twentieth century, we had tomatoes, but now we have more than 100 breeds of tomatoes to adapt to different soil and climate. On one hand, that makes it profitable for farmers.
On the other hand
, we have a lot more options for
food
 selection, and there are lesser countries worrying about starvation.
For instance
, Vietnam exports more than 15 million tons of rice every year. It not only keeps the
food
 security for the citizens
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 but
also
 build up the economy for its own. With the massive growth in population, it is very important to make lives better, and I think we are on the right way.
Moreover
, we should take caution about the bad side of the new era, like pollution, or
food
 wastage.
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