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Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has a negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The
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 industry actively increasing and rivalry between rest places makes
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 cheaper and available for the majority of
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 class. Today many
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 visiting foreign countries for pleasure and have a good rest. But, some
people
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 think that
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travel
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 has a negative effect
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 the countries
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 to. I disagree with
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 point and
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, it is easier to
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.
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 doesn't always have to cost millions of dollars. Nowadays,
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 have the opportunity to go to places with cheap accommodation. It
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 helps in forming meaningful links. The
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 they meet while
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 can be their most important contacts.
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 can introduce an individual to a wide variety of lifestyles and cultures.
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, the benefit of
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 spending foreign money in the country will greatly boost the economy. But,
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 actually prefer to have good holidays and do not think about
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 harm to the nature and environment. They don’t clean up trash after themselves and behave inappropriately towards local rules and traditions.
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 attending the national parks of Canada every year leave
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 kilograms of trash. It becomes a cause of disease of local animals. After all, wild animals that have sat down on
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 garbage suffer from problems with peeling and some non-digestible types of waste
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 as plastic become the cause of their death. The tourism industry plays a significant role in the country’s economic development. It helps in creating employment opportunities for
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 large number of
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, but the type of
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 described earlier causes the greatest damage to
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 countries. Not all holidaymakers are like that, and responsible
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 respect local customs
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 who take care of the environment and their majority, In conclusion, there are numerous benefits of international
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 which cannot be overlooked and overweight the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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