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Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solution should be given?

#influence #people #clothes #shoes
Advertising is
a
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 untenable truth coma
which
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that
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 is helping
to
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the
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apply
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consumerism.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 these are very influenced by the consumers. In
this
 essay explain about the consequence of the problems and which
this
 remedial measures.
Firstly
 the advertisements are given
negative
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a negative
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 impact
of
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 customers. The continue watching of the these AdWords create a positive approach about the
product
 something they don't need
this
product
however
 getting more ambitious to buy things for
instant
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 the recent survey showed that the sales rate is comparatively high to the part 10 years full stop the main reason behind that AdWords
are
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 highly influential the customers especially in the ladies gangsters and children.
On of another
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 major problem are
frustration
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 and disappointment of spectacles because the continuous watching of these add cors disable about their
this
product
 they don't getting the chance to buy
this
product
 at that time they automatically fell down these stages
moreover
 the sub-process lending to do
over do
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 Jo criminal job and in order to sell drugs
this
 will negatively affect the family as well as society
stop
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. The burning of the advertisement is an impossible process because which given benefit to the government. For the
more
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 it provided valuable revenue in the country some time it is very helpful for the consumer to identify the quality brand and prices we can easily know about the new
product
 with the help of browsers flexes. In essence, the banning of the advertisement is an impossible thing coma we can give education about the customers and receive consumerism.
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