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In the past , students completed their higher education in their own country but , nowadays they like to go abroad to complete their higher education . Write advantages and disadvantages .

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Nowadays an increasing number of
undergraduate
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undergraduates
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 are going abroad to complete their higher
education
 as compared to
past
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the past
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 . In my ,opinion there have many advantages to go abroad to study .
Firstly
 , in the past three have many
opportunities
 for
students
 but right now population are increasing day by day and
opportunities
 are less for
students
 after completing their graduation they can't find a
job
 smoothly they have to compete with many candidates for getting a
job
 .
On the other hand
 , in the past
students
 could get a
job
 easily , when they had many
opportunities
 in their own
country
 . But nowadays
students
 prefer to complete their higher
education
 in a developed
country
 . Overseas
students
 can learn a new language . Nowadays companies like to select multilingual employees because they are competent than monolingual employees
Also
 they can know about a new culture because language and culture are inextricably linked . Overseas
students
 gain a great understanding of the world they can many things about the world . They can try different sorts of foreign food and communicate with foreign people . Some countries give the opportunity to find a
job
 after finishing their
education
also
 they can settle in their dream
country
 . They achieve an experience to adapt to the new environment . In developed ,countries
students
 can work beside their
study
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studies
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 they can give their
tution
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tuition
 fees by using
this
 money .
Secondly
 , many people opinion theirs have some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 overseas
students
 have to stay alone in a foreign
country
 . They have to confront many challenging moments during their higher
education
 . they leave their family members and friends for going to abroad for
this
 reason they sometimes become disappointed . They maintain everything family members can't help them . To sum up , there have many advantages rather than disadvantages. As
students
 are getting many
opportunities
 and scholarships to complete their tertiary
education
 they should go abroad to complete their
education
 .
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