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Most countries offer two education systems from which parents can select the form of schooling which most suits their own child. Compare and contrast State-run and privately-owned schools in your own country or in a foreign country.

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In
this
 modern era ,
education
 is playing a vital role in the life of every individual . Many nations provide two choices in the
education
 system , guardians can choose a system from both of them for their children . There are many similarities and
difference
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 in
those academic system
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 To commence with , they both share the study material . As the
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syllabus
 and books of state and private schools are same , same knowledge and learning is provided to the scholars . Apart from
this
 , there is no discrimination
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 the
bases
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 of
intelligency
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intelligence
 and standard .
Although
 many
toodlers
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toddlers
 are very intelligent and
may be
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 weak in their academic performance or may belong to any rich/poor family , all of them get equal knowledge or
education
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 the school .
However
 , the teachers in the state schools are well-educated , in the private schools they might be less
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experienced
 and can lack
of
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knowledge . To illustrate ,
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even though
 there is
a
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 exam which has been conducted for the government teacher job if a person clear that exam
then
 he will be able to teach the students in
local
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 school , there is no exam for the private teacher they might be less educated .
In addition
 , there is a
noticable
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noticeable
 difference in the fees . While the parents have to pay very
less
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 for the
the
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institutes owned by
ramid
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rapid
Hamid
 , for the other they have to pay a huge amount of money for the study if their individual . In conclusion ,
nevertheless
 , the
education
 Systems
provide
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 by the country have alike course , there
is
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 very huge
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differences
difference
 in the fees .
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