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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive.

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In my opinion, every country should have a free
health
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 service for basic issues of
health
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.
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 gives chance to common
people
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 to go to any nearby clinic and get the checkup done and get the medication as early as possible,
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 reducing the chances of getting any
health
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 complications. It allows poor patients to be more confident to go to a doctor and seek any medical
treatment
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. There are numerous common diseases like flu, dengue, malaria, fever etc. which can be easily treated if a
patient
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 visits a doctor in the early stages. It
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 saves time and pain a
patient
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 oughts to go through to recover from.
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, there are several diseases that need to be operated or
treatment
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 takes several sessions.
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 involves costly medical devices, injections, medicines and expert surgeons. Sometimes these are imported from other countries as well. In
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 cases ,
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 a
patient
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 should pay for their
treatment
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 if he'd afford it. If a
patient
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 is not able to afford it
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 the government should do a number of arrangements for
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 patients or give some concessions in terms of cost for medical
treatment
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. It will help poor patients to get medically treated and
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 recover from the undergoing disease. It will save the lives of numerous poor or needy
people
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. The Government does take tax from
people
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 and it can be used in
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 situations. I have come across some
people
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 who unfortunately died since they did not have enough money to take any proper medical
treatment
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.
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 has
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 made the condition worse for the family of the expired person as he was young, and he has a wife and two kids who were solely dependent on him. If the medicinal
treatment
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 was free
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 it could have saved the precious life.
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, I feel every country should have a cost-free
health
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 service for a needy community.
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