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IE-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

#ie-mail #impact #communication #e-mail
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It is
acknowledged
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 fact that
email
 has
considerable
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 positive influence on workplace and social interactions as well as negative.
This
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this
 innovation
more
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are more
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 valuable and stronger than
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its
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 downsides. So it would be examined how
technology
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the technology
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 of sending mails by network make work more cooperative, save time and allow keep in touch with friends, whereas it can become
source
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a source
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 of stress for many people. It is obvious that
email
create
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opportunity
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an opportunity
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 to develop
cooperative
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a cooperative
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 environment where would be easy to handle with
time-management
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.
Thus
, employers can work together with one task by sharing
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result
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results
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 with each other.
Consequently
, it is
profitable
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a profitable
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 way to improve
accomplishment
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 and
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 of personal.
In addition
, it
save
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 a lot of important time because letters delivered immediately
that
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apply
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guarantee more space in
timetable
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 for work.
Furthermore
, you can keep in touch socially with your sibling, relatives by using
email
.
This
 innovative discovery
allow
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send
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sending
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 messages for very long distances without any serious issues.
For example
, you can send data from one side of Earth to another and it will deliver in one moment.
On the other hand
, getting more emails that need to be replied
may
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 increase pressure and cause various mental illnesses. I mean obsession
to
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with
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email
 technology can be considerable trouble because every letter will
wait
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 your answer.
Therefore
,
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 feeling of duty will press your psychological health.
For instance
, short and long-term stress become your companions for
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the big
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 period. To conclude, there are many obvious drawbacks of
email
 with workplace and pressure,
nevertheless
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 I believe that these professional and social benefits
has
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 more impact on our lives.
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