ONLINE SHOPPING IS SIGNIFICANTLY INCREASING. WHAT EFFECT DOES THIS HAVE PEOPLE, WHAT ARE THE DEMERITS AND WHAT ARE THE JOB OPPORTUNITIES?

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All
people
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know that online shopping’s popularity is growing day by day. Nowadays
majority
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of products are ordered online, not in real
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, because if you compare
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with buying in real
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,
then
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it is many times faster.
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example
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you don’t need to look for a product in the whole store for hours.
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of
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this
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you can find what you want
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one click in online markets. Online business
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has advantages and disadvantages.
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, as I mentioned before shopping online saves our time
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a
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several times, you can just click
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search bar and find
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desired in one
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.
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online has
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extensive
choice
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in items because those stores are all over the world.
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, I wanted to get some accessories from “Naruto”, but I couldn’t find them in my country so
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decided to order them in “
aliexpress
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express
” where most of the goods
produced
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in China.
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,
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much
more
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cheaper than shopping in real
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, due to the fact that in real stores salaries are paid to workers
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number is very big.
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However
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there are some cases when low quality or another product is delivered
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of
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.
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causes may be negligence of the seller or it can be scammers. All problems
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internet
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the internet
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attached to scam and online shopping
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also
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no exception.
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hand
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online business gives a lot of opportunities to workers like IT specialists and deliveries. Every online store should have its own website which must attract
people
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mind
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. For
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this
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we need IT
people
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who design and set up those sites.
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profession which makes a profit from
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is are the delivery men. The main feature of online shopping is delivery services
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all, it is almost only for
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that online stores are needed. It is necessary to summarize that online shopping is the new era in the
life
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of modern
people
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with great opportunities for the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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