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In some countries, more an more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house and building they live in. What are the reasons for it? How can people research this?

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Recently, lots of
people
 are becoming more
insqusitive
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inquisitive
 about the ancestral knowledge of the flats or home they reside.
This
 essay will discuss the idea behind the research and
also
 methods individuals can use to gain more
information
 about the history of the house they live in . Some of the major reasons why
people
 venture into finding out the ancestral roots of their house could be due to the fact that they
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want
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won't
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 discover who constructed the building and the aim of the designs .
For example
, a man named John Walker
in
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1940, went as far as one million million miles away from his city to look for the engineer who built his duplex, his goal for the Journey was to find out what type
iron
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 was used for the pillars.
In addition
, the public often
enquire
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 about history merely for entertainment purposes . Obviously, it could serve as folktales and bedtime stories for children. Following the logic behind peoples continues
search
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 for
information
 concerning their past in paragraph one, some of the methods by which they could discover more data about their history includes
use
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 of
internet
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the internet
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 and asking
of
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questions from
people
 who are very familiar with that particular building .
For instance
,
google
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 has
information
 about a mansion my Dad bought
in
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 an island, it was previously owned by a sailor who was
also
 the architect of the building himself. Notwithstanding,
people
 still prefer to get the
information
 locally by asking around from friends, family, neighbours and even strangers. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 are not aware of their home
information
 ,
majority
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the majority
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 are working very hard to find out more about the place they live in and due to
technology
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advancement
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 it is easy to go on
website
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the website
a website
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 to know more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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