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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and your opinion.

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Many governments consider economic growth as their most important goal while some
people
 think there are other kinds of progress that are as important for a
country
. While there are some factors like education and culture that have minor influences on the advances of a
country
, I believe the financial situation would still be the most influential on the development of a
country
. For some
people
, education plays an equally important role as money.
In other words
, an educated population could help their
country
 grow by developing knowledge in many aspects and
consequently
 raise the awareness of every individual
that is
 considered to be a development. In a similar manner, cultural growth would significantly affect the quality of the life of
people
.
For example
, Developing the culture of a
country
 would help its inhabitants save their natural environment and
therefore
, enhance their quality of life lived in that environment.
Although
 those aspects are considered to have the same importance, a prosperous life would only be possible if the financial levels in the economy rise. Monetary conditions can affect other growth aspects quite dramatically.
For instance
, in an underdeveloped
country
that is
 considered poor in the economy, culture doesn't seem to be very effective and educational efforts to bring about awareness wouldn’t help the development of the
country
 as much. In conclusion, while there are other types of improvement that can have influences on a
country
 to some extent, it is only the role of the economy that would cause major progress in that
country
. Many governments think that economic improvement is their most important goal. Some
people
,
however
, think that other types of progress are equally important for a
country
. Discuss both these views and your opinion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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