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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the appearance of
movies
 on the small screens has made some
people
 believe that seeing a new blockbuster on the big screen is obsolete.
Conversely
, many
individual
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 argue that the experience of watching a
movie
 in the way it is intended is irreplaceable. Personally, I find the idea of being able to see new
movies
 on your
movies
 appealing.
This
 essay is aimed to
further
 elaborate my perspective in
details
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detail
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.
First
 and foremost, the convenience of staying at home and watch a film cannot be
replicate
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 in
movie
theaters
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theatres
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 and cinemas. As
people
 have a wider array of
movies
 to choose from for free, they will choose to stay inside rather than having to spend over $8 for a
movie
 ticket.
Additionally
, the ability to freely decide whether or not to skip, to watch again, or to speed forward
also
 contribute to why
people
 choose to
watching
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watch
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movies
 on personal electronics. For illustration, with the introduction of online
movie
 services
such
 as Netflix or Disney +,
people
 have more reasons to stay at home and not go to the cinema.
Moreover
, in today world, which is plagued with Covid-19, many
people
 are afraid of social interaction, which severely impact the habit of going to the
theater
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theatre
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 of
people
. To
further
 explain, with a raging pandemic in many different countries
such
 as the U.S or China,
people
 are now more reluctant to travel to a crowded place just for the sole purpose of entertaining themselves with a
movie
.
For example
, personnel of companies
such
 as Disney have found through a survey that there has been a large increase in the percentage of
people
 who would not go to a
movie
theater
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theatre
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 due to personal reasons. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 may oppose the view that gadgets
such
 as phones and tablets have partially replaced big
movie
screen
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, I completely agree with
this
 point of view due to the aforementioned reasoning.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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