Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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that prison who do something badly can receive it,
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nonetheless
many
people
think that it is too strong and it is uncivilized. While there are those
people
who believe that legal
punishment
can inhibit crime cases, I entirely agree
punishment
is the only way to reduce those crime scenes. In order to send a
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jail, the
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people
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to the government about
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others due to these cases appear several times recently. Especially during the pandemic, a multitude of
people
do not have any cash to pay at the end of the month, so the
last
approach is to harm others. These have bolstered that without legal
punishment
not every
person
will do moral things. Having said that, without capital
punishment
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population
in the country have to prepare themself even when they stay in a house.
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, the crimes will
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significantly because
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villains
can do anything they want, and they still enjoy
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their life on other
people
's hardships. If the country
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no any discipline, it could change
people
behaviour directly so that
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preventing
prevent
themself from criminal, they have to get home before sunset because outside is no longer safe.
Lastly
,
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dancing
is the answer to solve those situations
although
it can not stop violation completely. I believe that if we do not have disciplines, our lives would be more difficult.
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