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The Best Way To Improve Health Is To Do Regular Exercise. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#health #exercise
Human
health
 can be separated into two parts, the
first
one
 is mental
health
 that we can improve mental
health
 by reducing stress and get positive energy, but the
second
one
 is physical
health
; the rest should do the thing to enhance
this
 type of
health
.
However
, there is
one
 thing that these two sides of
health
 shared to improve themselves, which is
exercise
. The following paragraph will be discussing my agreement.
Therefore
, the conclusion has been reached. In explanation, regular
exercise
 is a common thing that humans should.
Exercise
 can be beneficial for us in many ways,
such
 as improving
body
 muscle, reducing weight, making the immune system strong enough to fight bacteria or viruses. Especially the former example,
this
 is crucial because, according to the research, humans should do sufficient
exercise
 in
one
 day to keep the
body
 healthy.
In addition
, not only for the physical
health
 from the previous paragraph. Regular
exercise
also
 can improve mental
health
 because, while we are doing
exercise
, some chemical in our brain will release; to make our
body
 feels fresh and enjoys the activities.
Also
, it is a challenge for us to work out, set goals and try to achieve them. In summary, I strongly agree that a regular workout is the best way to enhance our strength because of the following examples and the fact from research. If we have sufficient action in
one
 day, it will help our
body
 in physical and mental
health
. Especially in mental
health
that is
 the present day, many people suffer mental problems due to the world situation and economy.
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