Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extend do you agree?

It is thought by many that social networking
sites
,
for instance
, Facebook has
detrimental
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effect on people both as
individuals
as well as a society or community. I completely agree with
this
statement, social networking
sites
have caused issues not only for
individuals
but
also
for communities. With regards to
individuals
, these networking
sites
,
although
believed that
it
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connects people from all over the world, not a single person develops a real or close connection with anyone.
For instance
, if any of your friends from the social
sites
fall sick, let alone caring for them, some wouldn’t even be aware that they were unwell. These social networking connections are simply fake connections.
Furthermore
,
this
leads to isolation and depression as well. Many of them will not be interested in going out and meeting friends but would prefer staying in their rooms and chatting online.
This
ultimately leads to dejection and desolation.
On the other hand
, when it comes to societies, one may be connected to a person living miles away yet would not recognize their
next
-door neighbour.
This
is mainly because one is constantly in touch with their friends
in
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social
sites
but would not have had the time to go out and meet
your
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neighbour.
As a result
, societies have become more
disjoined
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and fragmented.
In addition
to that, people of the same localities do not have any close relationships. They are all involved only in their social world and individual
sites
of their own. To conclude, these networking
sites
neither have any positive impact on
individuals
nor
in
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societies.
Although
, these have been created to bring the world closer, somewhere it has brought distances in close relations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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