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With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with the fact that parents of millennials
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 have a huge responsibility in restricting the
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 and social media access for their children, where they might be exposed to harmful situations eventually to social and mental trauma.
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the behavioural problems arising out of addiction to the
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 and
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 about the serious consequences of the deadly games on the
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 without parental guidance.
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,
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 browsing social media websites are easily attracted to obscene and inappropriate content in the form of games and videos. If the not curtailed child may develop altered behaviour like stress,violence and eventually addiction that will take a toll on their mental wellbeing.
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, a recent survey conducted on
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 playing online shooting games like PubG shown a higher incidence of aggressive behaviour among players compared to the control group and they
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 exhibited withdrawal tendencies after their abstinence from playing.
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, access to certain sections of the
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 can have extreme life-threatening consequences. Particularly, In the year 2016, the juvenile population across the world fell into the prey of an online game called 'Blue whale' which gained notoriety in inflicting self-harming tendencies and allegedly died in few cases. If the parents inspected their
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' web activities adverse outcomes could have been readily averted To conclude, Children exposed to inappropriate content on the
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 and social media websites are prone to develop behavioural problems and it can be lethal in some cases.
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 I completely agree that it is the duty of each and every parent to restrict the child's
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 usage to avoid these untoward consequences.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dangerous situations
  • limit access to the internet
  • inappropriate content
  • online predators
  • physical and mental health
  • monitoring and guiding
  • online safety
  • school curriculum
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