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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Environment problems are one of the most debated topics nowadays because everyone starting to pay attention to them. Despite the fact we know that human is the main factor that causes global warming, many
people
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 still continue to do something that harms the planet. The following paragraph will discuss the
activities
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 that
people
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 do.
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 with, some furniture in a house is made of wood, so the price of rare wood has been increased significantly over the decades.
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, the trees are cut by some group of
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 who just want to gain profit from them without considering what they have done will affect the earth later on because the trees can absorb carbon dioxide,
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 known as CO2, which is the cause of greenhouse effect. Amazon forest,
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, which is considered as a lung of the world, is having a crisis about deforestation because there is some reported that woods in Amazon is going to decreased in the future due to those
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. In order to figure
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 problem out, the government should do something to protect the forests because if it is not,
people
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 would struggle to live on the earth surely. While there are
people
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 who still logging, the government should make legal punishment to reduce these
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. Even though
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 punishment might not solve it completely, some populations are afraid of
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 law. To conclude, I would not tell that deforestation is the only reason that affects the world because there are other
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 that cause
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 problem as well.
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, deforestation is arguably the most debate topic when talking about
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 crisis.
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