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would governments make decisions about peoples lifestyle or people should make their own decision

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With the advent of globalization, the lifestyle of people has varied dramatically from the older to the newer generations. Some people argue that the government has a right to decide how its citizens live, whilst others claim that every individual has the right to decide their own fate. In
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 we shall look at both sides to
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 coin. On one hand, that administration is responsible for setting up the infrastructure which is needed to build up the economy.
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 can range from the building of schools, enhancement of hospital facilities and
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transportation networks to building recreational facilities. If these requirements are not provided for, it will not go down well with its nationals.
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, in Trivandrum, the capital of the state of Kerala there are constant road maintenance works be carried out by the local authority.
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 causes severe traffic jams, but the natives adjust as they realise the benefit these works will have for them.
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, two weeks after completion of these jobs, the roads collapse again which gets the taxpayers furious, as it is their money
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 is constantly being utilised for the same project. Alternately, mankind believes that only they should be in control of their way of life. Making a resolution
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 as, living a healthier life is a resolution that only one can make, and thereby they will take all the necessary steps to achieve
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 goal. Activities
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 as yoga, running, walking etc do not require any other intervention, but only the desire to proceed.
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, other exertions
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 as swimming, football, basketball etc require assistance from the government for setting up of the facilities. In conclusion,
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 of both the ministry and the individuals will lead to a
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well sculpted
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 situation.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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