IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
It is conspicuous that computer usage is proliferating in every walk of our life. Few people are afraid that they will substitute
teachers
 in the education system. I believe
teachers
 are our guides and nobody can replace them in our schools, colleges or universities. Admittedly, the computer is a
wonder
Replace the word
wonderful
show examples
 machine and there is no paucity of information on the web. Every conceivable data is available to satisfy the curiosity of individuals. With its interactive capability, it’s gaining the
interests
Fix the agreement mistake
interest
show examples
 of toddlers and youngsters. There are various intelligent software and simulators which enable people to grasp knowledge faster and in an easier way. Digital books are
also
 available which helps individuals for having more information in no physical space. The importance of computers is irrefutable.
However
, every individual is inimitable and have specific needs in their studies or learning.
Teachers
 are the
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
show examples
 who can understand the individuality of a pupil and guide him/her with clear concepts. Computers can ameliorate the access of knowledge but
teachers
 are the
one
Correct pronoun usage
ones
show examples
 who can polish the student with the right guidance. In
this
 modern era,
teachers
 need to adapt so that they can assist their students with their great experience and
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
computer aid. In the light of
aforementioned
Correct article usage
the aforementioned
show examples
 points, computers are necessary as they are inundated with information to help individuals learn but at the same time
teachers
 with their adapted behaviour can give better guidance.
Hence
 there is no exaggeration to say that
teachers
 were important in past, they hold a valuable place in
present
Add an article
the present
show examples
 and will be our need in future as well; nobody can take their position in the classroom.
Submitted by planklastin on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: