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Your neighbour has animals and they cause noise. Write a letter - Describe the situation - Suggestion to solve the problem - Tell him what will you do if he will not solve the problem

#neighbour #animals #noise #situation #suggestion
Dear Mr Jas I hope you are well. My name is John Smith, I recently moved next to your house. I am writing
this
 letter to tell you about the problem caused by the loud noise of your pets. I am a well-renowned science teacher at the University of Toronto. I am running classes for my students so that they can achieve good grades for their graduation. For the past few days, your pets have been making too many loud noises which are disturbing me and my students during sessions.
Due to
this
, they cannot concentrate on their studies and it is very hard to teach them in a
such
 booming environment. Every day, I teach my class from 4:00 pm to 6:00 pm, so
this
 issue can be solved if you take your dogs to the nearest park in those hours.
As a consequence
, your domestic animals will become calm and do not roar at home. I request you to please follow the instructions that I have given you if not
then
 I would have to take legal action against you. Regards John Smith
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task achievement
Consider providing a more detailed description of the problem and its impact on your work. This can help the reader understand the gravity of the situation better.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence, try adding transitional phrases between paragraphs. For example, 'Moreover,' or 'Additionally,' to connect the paragraphs smoothly.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, making it polite and formal which is suitable for the context.
logical structure
The letter is well-structured with distinct paragraphs for each point (situation, suggestion, and consequence).
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