Museum and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not by local people. Why is this so? What could be done to encourage more local visitors? Please include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In recent times, historical
sites
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and museums are not frequented by local
residents
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,
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however
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tourists were broadly interested in visiting
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places.
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essay will discuss the possible reasons for
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issue and elucidate the ways of
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local people to visit these
sites
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. To commence with the reasons,
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and foremost,
residents
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are not passionate about museums which located nearby the home and diffidently, people do not have any leisure time in order to visit ancient places.
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way
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, the local heritage
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losses
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their interest and importance, owing to
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that individuals prefer to visit
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modern and attractive museums. A minority part of
residents
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do
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not
spent
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their essential time
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looking for
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archeological
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and old
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.
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experience, the “A. Kasteyev State Museum of Arts ” which is located in Kyzylorda city do not
visited
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such
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as the
residents
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do not interested in
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place. Undoubtedly, every lock has a key, so one possible solution is encouraging the government to pay attention to reconstruct historical places.
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, the changing into contemporary form with aesthetic design can attract
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number of visitors. Rearranging historical
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absorb not only visitors but
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the local inhabitant.
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, in the Turkestan city “Keruen-Saray” is built and “Xoja Ahmad Yassaviy” witnessed the
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development. According to
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process,
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of visitors experienced a sharp increase. In conclusion, authorities and individuals, both should step forward together in order to gain the local interest back. The historical
sites
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should be visited by local people
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as they are
valuable
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sign of history and culture from
past
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the past
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generation.
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