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It could be argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.

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Some people think that
technology
 makes our lives more convenient while others consider
technology
 actually makes our life more complicated. In my opinion, we cannot live without
technology
 because we have gotten used to the convenience that
technology
 brings to us particularly, the inventions of cell phones and the
internet
 have greatly changed our lifestyles. I will explain that as follows.
First
 of all, the improvement of mobile phones changes the ways of our communication. Traditionally, we used analogue phones to talk, ear to ear. Nowadays, we can talk through lenses on smartphones,
face
 to
face
.
This
 is the proven fact that
technology
 brings convenience to us.
For instance
, When I was a child, I just chatted with my grandmother through traditional telephones. Even though I missed my grandmother I still could not meet her. Thanks to the invention of smartphones, I can directly communicate and talk
face
 to
face
. I have enjoyed the convenience that
technology
 brings to me.
However
, somebody would feel it is very troublesome because they probably increase the chances and time of
formal
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the formal
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 meeting.
Furthermore
, the invention of
Internet
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the Internet
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also
 positively enhances the way we shop, study, and
Work
. In the past, we only shop physically, selecting stuff without comparing prices; We attend classrooms, gaining knowledge from teachers; We go to
work
 in the office, dealing
tasks
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 in person. Now, people can compare the prices of one merchandise, learn subjects or get degrees, and do remote
work
 through the
internet
.
For example
, I complete a certification, shop and do remote
work
 online, which makes me realize how convenient the
internet
 is. People who think
technology
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