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Q. Social media has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using social media outweigh the advantages?

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number
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impact
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the impact
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. Some
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 believe that social
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impact
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 as it
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 fast and easy
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communicate
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 about social and professional issues, while
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 think it has
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a more
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 negative
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 as more
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 were wasting their
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 than its drawback of killing productive
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 of youth
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 as
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 addictive habit.
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,
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 to 3
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’s productivity and creativity. Despite
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 of significant benefits to using social
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 in professional and social
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 of all, it has made
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provide
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 huge
opportunity
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 by providing easy access for all
people
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a message
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message
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messages
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 of
people
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with in
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, which was not possible other than
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social
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, through social
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people
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 can communicate fast, as
one
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message
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 can display on millions
number
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People
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 can disseminate any
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 of
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 in their group within a
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, which makes
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 fast. Take a Facebook post as an example, if a celebrity post a photo or any
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 of followers can get
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message
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the message
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 instantly. In conclusion,
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, it is clear that social
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 has
significant
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a significant
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 role in
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 whether it is professional or personal. I agree that benefits of the social
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 outweigh the disadvantages.

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