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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
 are having a lot of fitness issues because they are consuming fast foodstuff most of the time. In many countries, the numbers of unhealthy
people
 are rising significantly and
therefore
 some
people
 think that the government should implement a higher
tax
 on
this
food
 category.
Although
 I agree that the government should increase the expense to reduce the consumption of fast
food
, I
also
 believe that encouraging the community to eat healthy snacks will be more beneficial for fitness. On one hand, implementing a high amount of
tax
 on a fast meal will reduce its consumption. The higher the
tax
, the more expensive it will be to purchase these
food
 items for the majority of the population.
For instance
, middle and lower class
people
 who buy fast
food
 most of the time because of cheap rates will start purchasing less frequently. As the majority of the population comes into the middle and lower class category,
thus
 it will dramatically decrease the use of fast
food
.
Therefore
, it will benefit the well-being of citizens in the long run.
On the other hand
, Encouraging
people
 regarding healthy snacks will
also
 decrease the consumption of fast foodstuff. By educating the community regarding the benefits of eating a balanced diet for a healthy body and mind will change their perception about fast
food
.
Moreover
, a family can still choose to eat outside just by replacing fast
food
 with healthy
food
 options.
For instance
,many restaurants have options for delicious salads and freshly cooked meals that are tasty and healthy.
This
 way
people
 will become aware of their fitness. To conclude, as the population are eating more fast
food
 nowadays, the government should impose a higher
tax
 on these
food
 items.
However
, encouraging society regarding healthy edibles will
also
 decrease health problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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