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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need explain how you will keep up-to-date while you’re away suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Mr. Stika, As you know every year me and my family travel to Europe for a lot of personal reasons.
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, my daughter has to pass the test in her native language and
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 we have to visit our doctors and sort out our new passports to extend our visas.
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, I am able to continue with my
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 from our European branch on a daily basis and give you my daily results every day. Here I want you to suggest my solution for how I'll
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 during my annual leave.
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 we'll be very busy I am able to
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 from our branch every day from 7:00 am to 4pm from Monday till Friday
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 because of the time zone I can
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 overtime if ll come something very urgent. I hope Mr Stika that my explanation is enough and if you need more information please don't hesitate to contact me Thank you

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organization
You've organized the letter well, but some paragraphs contain multiple ideas. Ensure each paragraph covers a single idea to improve clarity.
language
Although the letter is clear and polite, there are some grammar and punctuation errors. Proofreading your letter for minor language mistakes would enhance readability.
content
You've done a great job of addressing all parts of the task, but you might provide a little more detail on how you will keep up-to-date while you're away.
content
You provided a complete and suitable response, covering all the required points clearly.
tone
Your tone is appropriate for a business letter, which helps in maintaining professionalism.
structure
Your greeting and closing are both suitable and polite, giving a good overall structure to your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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