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Some People think that success is the best measure intelligence, while others believe that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your Opinion.

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Nowadays,
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society believe that achievement can be countable, and it is dependent on one’s intelligence. Whereas other thinks that it can be measured in different parameters.
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, in my opinion, I believe that
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 time and
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 approach, my view is justified in the following paragraph.
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 with,
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 persons will take
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decision
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 time, to avoid any obstacles and to achieve the result. While every person will be in his
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 based on the way they chose in their
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. MS Dhoni,
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purse
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 his career in cricket despite
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having a good job during his early days. His
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 has made him
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be more successful in
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 part of his
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, they make
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 based on the situation which will help
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 to reduce risk and ultimately they will achieve the result.
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, one needs to decide the
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 approach based on their skills are important to be considered. It is very essential to understand
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 ability they have to achieve anything.
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. As per the recent study show by the Time of India, that many
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 who
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 the UPSC exams had to
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 a proper method and they have chosen the main subjects as per
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 ability, ultimately it
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 them to clear it in
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 attempt.
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, people with talent will avoid disturbance in order to achieve their
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. In Conclusion,
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 success can be calculated based on the achievement,
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, it can be shown in the
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 they take and the method to follow to avoid interruption in their
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