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These days, people in many countries are living in a “throw-away” society, which means people use things for a short time and then just throw them away. What are the reasons for this and what are the consequences?

The world today has changed, and everyone throws their things away. Sometimes,
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 buy silly things and
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 they throw them away.
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, when they buy something, they use it once .
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 essay will examine the reasons for
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 and the consequences. On the one hand, there are many reasons for throwing
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 away. First , technology has improved .
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, every year there are new iPhones, so now there is iPhone Seventeen .
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, every year , scientists develop devices , so
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 throw their old devices away
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 they buy new ones . Second,
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 adore buying new products because it is cheap .
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, there are many stores that sell inexpensive
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 .
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 , it is easy to replace
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 of repairing .
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,
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 have a lack of environmental awareness . Some
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 do not care about their environment .
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 , they do not think about recycling the
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 .
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,
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 , there are several consequences of throwing
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 away. First , it can cause pollution . There is an unbelievable amount of waste that can cause pollution. Second , the waste of plastics has increased .
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, many cafes use plastics like plastic cups and straws .
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, plastic waste harms animals .
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, throwing things away can increase the disposable material culture . That will make everybody focus on buying
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 of value . Everyone wants to follow the trends ,and they do not care about value . In conclusion , there are plenty of reasons for throwing
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 away.
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,
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 can affect the environment, and
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 is dangerous for all types of life.

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planning
Plan your answer with a simple plan. Start with a short intro, then two or three clear points, and finish with a short ending line.
grammar
Check your grammar and form. Use one idea per sentence and end each thought with a full stop. Use the same subject and tense.
content
Choose one or two good examples and tie them to your idea. Don’t use too many new facts.
structure
You give a view on the topic and plan to explain.
content
You give ideas about pollution and plastic waste.
argument
You use both sides and end with a conclusion.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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