With a growing world population, one of the most pressing issues is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the advancement of technology, the mortality rate has dropped resulting in an overall larger population as compared to decades before. The main problem that arises from
this
overpopulation is the ability or the inability to feed the growing inhabitants. Some people think that resorting to genetically modified food is the answer.
However
, I disagree with
this
notion, as it will cause more harm than it does good. For
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many people believe genetically modified foods are the way to go because they will always be readily available. Whatever the season, the crops will be able to grow and thereby there will never be the question of food shortages.
For example
, fruits like apples, oranges, and grapes all grow in a particular season.
However
, if these fruits are produced genetically the public can consume them all year round.
On the other hand
, the drawback of
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is the fact that
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the public
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not know what ingredients are available in these products. As they are genetically produced, only
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scientists are aware of their
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methods.
This
makes the crowds sceptical of the product.
Secondly
, as these crops are produced genetically, there is a greater chance they will be immune to antibiotics, which will result in
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individuals risking the chance of an infection. In conclusion, I feel that genetically modified crops are not the way to go, because
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they will solve the obvious difficulty of feeding an overpopulated nation, they could in fact lead them to other
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problems.
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