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Some peopel think that one world government is better than national governments. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 contemporary era, most people believe that there should be a single
government
 in
this
world
. All commands should be handle by one
government
. I partially agree with
this
 statement.
Thus
 essay will discuss its advantages and disadvantages in the forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are some benefits of one-
world
government
.
Firstly
, the gap between the two nations will eliminate. Each and every nation will become developed. Rules and regulations are imposed the same in every nation. The new
government
 will finish the borders and each and every person can travel the whole
world
. There will
also
 be no need to pay tax on borders.
For instance
, In tribune time newspaper I read an article of one-
world
government
 it explains how the
world
 will not suffer from poverty. So, it will beneficial for developing nations. Oh the contrary, if I talk about the culture of different states, it will suffer. People in the Asia region will start following western cultures and will forget about their cultural festivals and traditional dresses.
Moreover
, religious values will suffer. There will
also
 be no excitement to go abroad and get Visa. Life will become boring. To conclude, in my opinion,
one
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one-world
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world
government
 has benefits as well as drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global peace
  • uniform policies
  • conflicts
  • boundaries
  • resources
  • efficient global responses
  • crises
  • pandemics
  • climate change
  • unified strategy
  • resource allocation
  • social justice
  • redistributing resources
  • extreme poverty
  • inequality
  • cultural diversity
  • global governance
  • tyranny
  • abuse of power
  • centralized authority
  • checks and balances
  • logistical challenges
  • implementation
  • governance
  • laws
  • languages
  • cultural practices
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