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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In these present
times
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, the value of a
person
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 seems to be dependent on social achievement and luxurious possession while, old
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 values,
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 as honour, kindness and trustworthiness, seem not to be too necessary. I completely agree that in
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 modern generation, people values are attached to
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 and expensive materials.
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, a
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 worth in
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 modern dispensation is glued to their richness because of the importance of
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 to the economy. In ancient
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, people who are trustworthy are being honoured to be chief, king and part of
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, the ancient Egyptian knights were men of honour and valour and they are very respected in society.
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, the
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 of those days are necessarily been accrued to a
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 who has no end to be honoured.
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, individuals worth in
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 century is being assessed base on the
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 showing off for social media. Social media platforms have been used by the affluent to influence the mind of the public in the and society and folks see them as a demigod. More so, various chieftaincy titles are being bought by them and they are reverend as icons to many.
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 decades, in Nigeria, the number of chiefs in the southeastern part of the country had increased because they are wealthy and can afford
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 prestigious positions.
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, royalties are now for sale and those that can afford them are accorded respect. In conclusion, an individual worth in recent
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 seems to be linked to social attainment and material things because the value of
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 and honour can be bought.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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