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vehicles people had in China from agree or disagree

#vehicles #people #china
The bar chart illustrates how many
vehicles
people
 had in China from 1987 to 1999. The information
were
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 received from thousands of
people
 Overall, the number of
vehicles
 experienced an upward trend throughout the period. Between 1995 and 1999, the figure showed a significant change At the beginning of the period, the
amount
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 of
vehicles
 was under 500 of all thousand Chinese
people
 and it
then
 increased by double to around 500. It continued to rise to about 800 in 1991 and slightly grew to approximately 900 in the
next
 few years.
However
, the number of
vehicles
 that Chinese
people
 own dramatically climbed to nearly 2000 by 1995.
In addition
, before 1999, the figure showed the same growth rate (by around 1000) as in the year 1995. At the end of the period, Chinese citizens spent more money on
vehicles
.
As a result
, the
amount
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 of
vehicles
 reached the top at over 4000 per thousand
people
.
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