In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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It has become evident that a huge part of our world is now influenced by the fashion industry and that most adults but even teens choose how to style their hair and what clothes to buy based on the latest trends. The reason for what is going on is mostly the rise of new technologies, and I personally think that

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can be seen as something negative. In the

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few years, progress has been made that has allowed us to be connected with almost anyone through social media.

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, being online has resulted in us being influenced, sometimes even subconsciously, by influencers and people who work in fashion. Because of how our mind works, we are tempted to use the same clothes or hairstyles of famous people, to the point that it quickly becomes a trend, and if you don't follow it you're certainly going to feel excluded.

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, when I was in high school, and we all just started using Instagram, there was a popular way to dye your hair, and soon after almost everyone there had the same colour. I find

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to be a rather negative development. I do think that using social media to do advertising is great, but, on the other side, it's difficult to see how we all are almost forced to be the exact same person, and if you don't follow the trends, you're definitely going to be seen as strange.

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is extremely hard for the youth and those who are still in school because not fitting into the image of a perfect teenager can surely result in being bullied.

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, when I went to middle school, all those who didn't have a specific pair of shoes were deemed as not "cool", and

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was difficult for a child to endure. In conclusion, the increase in the use of technologies is for sure why we are so obsessed with dressing according to the latest fashion, even though I think that

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is to be considered as a negative situation, rather than a positive one.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

346 words

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In many countries in the world people buy clothes and choose hair styles according to latest fashion. Why is this happening ? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

Some people think books are lossing their importance in information and entertainment purposes.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

The population of most cities is growing as people move cities to find work and new opportunities. What problems does overpopulation in cities cause ? How can these problems be solved?

Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The image below shows the process of making carbonated drinks. summarise the information by seleand reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant