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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the manage� should do to improve the food in future

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention the views of our company guests who were invited to your hotel for an all-day meeting on September 25th, which I recently received. Among their feedback, most of them appreciated your welcoming environment, adding sentimental value to your hotel.
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, they claimed that the vibrant colours you used for your walls present a meaningful sense of peace, transforming your hotel atmosphere into something like heaven.
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, the main point of disappointment was regarding your
food
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, which upset most of them. They said that your
food
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 was cold and the service was poor.
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, some of the
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 was too salty, which caused some of the guests to leave without eating anything. I kindly recommend that it would be better to increase your staff to reduce the time required to serve
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, preventing the
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 from cooling during service.
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, consider initiatives to cook healthier
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 with less salt. Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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structure
Break the letter into three small parts. 1) what was good, 2) what was not good about the lunch, 3) what to do next. Use short lines.
language
Use short and clear lines. Do not use too long words or long long phrases. Be direct when you say what was done and what to fix.
content
Give exact steps to fix food so the manager can act. For example, ask for a sample menu, a trial plan, and a time frame for change.
content
The letter names what guests liked about the hotel.
tone
The tone is polite and formal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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