Now a days extended family has less importance than past. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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some people think that integrated family losses its importance than past, I personally

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with that point. I feel the

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aforementioned

way for two reasons that I will explore in the ensuing essay.

First

of all, they can give us various important advice and help in various

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situations

with sincerity. So, if we live with them we have more chances to utilize the opportunity, in

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it is not possible. My personal experience is a compelling illustration.

For example

, when I face any problem of understanding any topic of science,

then

I go to my uncle who

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me to solve it very easily what is quite difficult for my own. In case of any university

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problems, my elder cousins stand by me. If I do not have

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this

type of benefits, I would not able to get.

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, you can enjoy your

time

more with them because you can find at least one person free to talk with you or give

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when you needed. So, we can spend our

time

with more comfort and ease

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family.

For instance

, as I am living in

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extended family, in

time

of my breaks; I can please myself by playing games or with other activities with my other family

memebers

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members

. But without them, I think, I can only use my devices in

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free

time

that is

not interesting always. In conclusion, extended

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families

importance is not reduced because you can get help from your uncles, cousins and other members in problems and you can spend your

time

more enjoyably.

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