There are more workers who work from home and more students who study from home. This is because computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

These days, the advancement of online
technology
enables
people
to work and study remotely via a computer's screen. As being easier to access, cheaper cost, and during Covid-19 pandemic, work from
home
and study online become main methods for continuing living during
this
adversity. In my opinion, the beneficial aspect of
technology
outnumbers the adverse effect as follows. The
first
advantage of
technology
development is having more
time
with family. Nowadays, most
people
can work everywhere and every
time
without leaving their homes.
For example
, they can make a conference dealing a project worth 1 million dollars via Zoom application, simultaneously staying at
home
, and taking care of their children.
Therefore
, they can spend quality
time
with pupils, which make the relationship getting closer. the development of
technology
not only provides more
time
with beloved
people
but,
also
helps
people
save a huge amount of money. As they do not have to leave their
home
, the cost of fuel and meals will be cut. Indeed, individuals do not need to buy new clothes when staying at
home
because they do not have to meet their colleagues and boss, which the Zoom application enables the user to change the background, and
also
the uniform.
As a result
,
people
will have more savings money by cutting the necessary payment. In conclusion, the online invention allows
people
to have more
time
spending with family, and to have more money in a bank because
people
do not need to leave their
home
, and beloved family so I strongly support that the development of
technology
is beneficial for mankind.
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