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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is noticeable that consuming fast
food
 on a prolonged basis will
develope
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develop
 various
dieseaes
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diseases
. To tackle
this
 problem, some countries plan to increase
tax
 on fast
food
.
However
,
higher
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tax
 would improve
this
 situation or not.
Imposting
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Imposing
Importing
higher
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a higher
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tax
 on fast
food
 only has a
maginal
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marginal
magical
 impact on preventing
people
 from eating too much junk
food
. For some
people
,the low
price
 of fast
food
 is not a primary reason for them to choose
this
 kind of
food
. Most of them prefer fast
food
instead
 of healthy
food
 just because they put the
convenice
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convenience
 on a higher priority than health.
Therefore
,
although
 an
increasement
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increment
on
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tax
 will result in a higher
price
, many consumers still choose fast
food
.
On the other hand
,some
people
 choose fast
food
 because they do not have alternatives. Healthy
food
such
an
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 organic
food
, usually have a higher
price
 which might not be affordable for
people
 who have low income.
Therefore
, if the
price
 of fast
food
 goes higher, they will be much fewer choices of
food
 for them, which will eventually lead them to a harder life. Compared with increasing
tax
, making healthy
food
 more convenient and more affordable to citizens might be a better solution for the government.
For example
, governments should offer subsidies to farmers who provide healthy products
such
 as fruit and vegetables so that consumers can buy healthy
food
with
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at
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 lower
price
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.
In addition
, spending budget on promoting
healthy
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 lifestyle through education and
trainning
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training
 to consumers is another practical solution for the problem caused by fast
food
. In conclusion,to cope with health
issue
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issues
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 caused by an excessive
consumtion
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consumption
 of fast
food
, the government should focus on reducing the
price
 of healthy
food
 and advertising the healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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 to the citizens, rather than simply charging a higher
tax
 on fast
food
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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