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Some people believe that advertising has a strong effect on a person's decision making process. Others feel that it has little or no real impact. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

#people #effect #person #decision #process #impact
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 pace of 21st-century technology
is
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 leapt to
the
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 level which was unimaginable
few
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a few
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 decades ago
due to
 which
People
 have many options in every field .
Although
 Some
people
 argue that aids have a strong effect on a person's choice
while
 purchasing anything, others consider that there is negligible effect on their decision . I agree with those who claim that it affects
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their commitment. To commence with , As many
people
 feel that
ads
 really impact their decisions , the advertisement is shown in a very attractive way by the company .
For example
 ,
although
 the
advertisements
of
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for
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 the food
are attracting
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attract
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 our
mind
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minds
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towards
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it
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because they are printed in a fabulous way
by
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which
people
 can easily
attract
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 towards
it
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, many
people
 tend to go
on
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to
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 their shop
for eating
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to eat
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 that food just by watching the ad they are not able to stop them .
In addition
 , many servers show
ads
 minute by minute . Even though there is
Internet
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 , TV , emails and so on by which company can display their product when we are using any services we can find many different
ads
 from different companies which seek our concentration towards them .
However
 ,
advertisements
 do not play a vital role in
people
's
preference
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preferences
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.
Nevertheless
, the
advertisements
 are trustworthy , nowadays
people
 are smarter than ever before they are not stuck or influenced by the
ads
 .
For instance
 , if a person watches an ad in front of him
then
 definitely he will not
starts
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 to believe in that just by seeing it because now everyone has a sense of thinking deeply about that it might be wrong . Even though
Mostly
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the products shown in
ads
 are not same in the reality , they prefer to buy things by seeing them and
judge
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 them in front of it ,not by the ad .
Moreover
 , they take
the
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suggestions from their family and relatives about the products ,
which
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and which
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 material is best to purchase
according to
 their experience . In conclusion , in spite
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of
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the
advertisements
 can attract the mind of
the
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people
 to buy that thing , most
people
 like to buy
the
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things at the
suggestions
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suggestion
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 of their relatives which is quite good for them .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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