The average standard of people health is likely to lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement
The life expectancy of human beings
are
reducing Change the verb form
is
day
by day
. In my opinion, due to sedentary
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a sedentary
lifestyle
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,lifestyle
people
are spoiling their health
and it will be more worsen in the future. This
essay will discuss the topic in detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, due to tight work schedules and job stress people
are not finding time to do exercises. Moreover
, due to white-collar jobs
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,jobs
people
are not physically active also
. Due to this
more than fifty percentage
of youngsters are diagnosed with chronic diseases like Hypertension and Diabetes Mellitus. Replace the word
percent
In addition
, a study conducted by World Health
Organization proved that ten in hundred
Correct article usage
a hundred
people
are diagnosing with the above-mentioned diseases per year.
Secondly
, due to dietary habits. Nowadays people
are eating all non organic
vegetables. Due to the chemicals in that many are getting life-threatening issues likes cancer. Add a hyphen
non-organic
In addition
, many people
are depending
fast foods as their bread and butter because of fast lifestyles. Add the preposition
ondepending
Therefore
, in
Change preposition
at
the
young age Correct article usage
a
itself
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,itself
people
are lossing
their Correct your spelling
losing
loosing
health
. However
, the active people
who follows
strict diet Change the verb form
follow
also
diagnosing
with Change the form of the verb
diagnosed
health
issues because of global warming. To summarize, because of all the mentioned factors the humans are failing to meet the standard health
and moreover
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,moreover
this
issues are increasing Change the determiner
these
day
by day
.
Finally
, people
are following a sedentary lifestyle because of that the average life expectancy is gradually declining and it will become more in the future. So, I strongly agree that the standard of human's health
will be lower in the future because of the above-mentioned reasons.Submitted by divyahemakumar2017 on
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