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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 modern world, having a rewarded and happy professional
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 is becoming very important and is
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 a common topic of discussion. Some
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 have the view that it is more likely to get a fulfilling
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 if they set up goals at an early stage and stick to one job, while others prefer to experiment and change jobs often. Despite both views are valid, I partly agree with the view of deciding a
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path
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 early in
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. On one hand, there is a big group of
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 who think that to be able to have an enjoyable
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 at work, they would need to decide at an early
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 a
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path
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 to follow,
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 decision may be triggered by some unconscious bias,
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, prompted by parents and tutors who often ask what do you want to be in the future.
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 who are exposed to
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 constant pressure, are likely to programme themselves and decide prematurely about their professional
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.
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, having
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 early decision
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 provides a mindset and direction, young professionals would focus and spend their time and energy to achieve
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 goals, examples of
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 could be doctors or health professionals who need to start preparing themselves from high school to enter medical school.
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, not everyone is suitable to decide early what professional
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 to follow. Some
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 are by nature more versatile and dynamic,
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, specialists of the creative industry, designers, entrepreneurs, all have the urge of experimenting and understanding how a certain industry and the job will look like, and
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 will many times means that they will change jobs frequently before settling and having a satisfying working
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. In conclusion, there are different ways to achieve a happy and rewarding
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 at work, some
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 are likely to take less risk and stick to a
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path
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 from an early
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, and others will experiment more and search until they find their passion. Personally, I partly agree with the view of deciding what to do at an early
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 is because at a young
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 we have little experience, and we often do not know what we really like and are passionate about. I believe we should be flexible and follow our hearts and our values, and surely we will have a satisfying working
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career path
  • job satisfaction
  • professional goals
  • climb the career ladder
  • develop expertise
  • long-term commitment
  • financial security
  • varied experiences
  • prevent monotony
  • job security
  • career progression
  • personal preferences
  • industry dynamics
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