Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is undeniable that nations are becoming more similar
with
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each other due to
people
from all over the world tend to purchase the same
products
. I consider that it to be a very negative trend. Because of industrialization and global trade, many traditions have disappeared. Global advertising encourages everyone to buy the same
products
. Clothes are
mass produced
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in standard sizes.
People
wear similar clothes, rather than traditional costumes. Jeans and T-shirts,
for instance
, are now worn throughout the world.
Moreover
, the appearance of each
cities
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city
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is gradually seem
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to be
same
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the same
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, which are all covered by high-rise buildings and skyscrapers. Modern concrete, steel and glass buildings are built in only weeks or months.
By contrast
, historic buildings took craftsmen years to build.
As a result
, there are fewer
people
who can create hand-made goods accompanying the disappearance of our own culture.
Therefore
, it is important for countries to maintain
our
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different cultural identities.
This
also
has a negative effect on work and economic
aspect
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. Most
products
are similar because they are now made in factories. It is difficult for machines to create special goods that different from others. They are only able to
produced
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the same
products
. Machinery has replaced skilled human labour led to more amount of unemployment, meaning that there are more
people
likely to depend on payment by the state.
This
brings more burdens to
government
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the government
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and
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taxpayers
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tax payers
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taxpayers
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,
also
causes the gap between rich and pool. It is harmful
for
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the
economic
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economy
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of a country. In short,
people
who buy
the
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apply
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similar
products
has many detrimental effects on both countries and cultures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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