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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is undeniable that nations are becoming more similar
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 each other due to
people
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 from all over the world tend to purchase the same
products
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. I consider that it to be a very negative trend. Because of industrialization and global trade, many traditions have disappeared. Global advertising encourages everyone to buy the same
products
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. Clothes are
mass produced
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 in standard sizes.
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 wear similar clothes, rather than traditional costumes. Jeans and T-shirts,
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, are now worn throughout the world.
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, the appearance of each
cities
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is gradually seem
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 to be
same
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, which are all covered by high-rise buildings and skyscrapers. Modern concrete, steel and glass buildings are built in only weeks or months.
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, historic buildings took craftsmen years to build.
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, there are fewer
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 who can create hand-made goods accompanying the disappearance of our own culture.
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, it is important for countries to maintain
our
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 different cultural identities.
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 has a negative effect on work and economic
aspect
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. Most
products
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 are similar because they are now made in factories. It is difficult for machines to create special goods that different from others. They are only able to
produced
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 the same
products
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. Machinery has replaced skilled human labour led to more amount of unemployment, meaning that there are more
people
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 likely to depend on payment by the state.
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 brings more burdens to
government
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the government
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 and
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taxpayers
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tax payers
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taxpayers
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,
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 causes the gap between rich and pool. It is harmful
for
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 the
economic
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economy
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 of a country. In short,
people
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 who buy
the
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apply
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similar
products
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 has many detrimental effects on both countries and cultures.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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