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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. sate advantages and disadvantages.

#university #students #part #studies #sate
Studying abroad as
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part of their
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university
studies
 is becoming popular
in
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the
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students
.
Altough
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Although
students
 will have a
benifit
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benefit
 of learning different languages but staying far away from the home will make them feel homesick. In my opinion,
students
 are far
better having
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studies
 in a different country despite the
challanges
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challenges
 that they will inevitably face. On the one hand,
students
 will have the
gratest
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greatest
 advantage of
learing
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learning
 a new
languge
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language
 which will improve their communication skills, that would have been impossible if they had have studied in their own countries. Good control
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 language will help the
students
 to clear
lingustic
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linguistic
 barriers among the locals and allows them to settle in their career.
For example
,
student
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a student
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 who travelled from Bangladesh to Australia will have a chance to learn and understand English, which later helps
him
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 to secure a professional job. For
this
 reason, pursuing degrees in
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another country has a significant advantage for
students
 in improving their
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knowledge
in
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 various languages.
On the other hand
, the main
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challenge
 that
student
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students
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 will face while overseas will usually a
home sick
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.
This
 situation can pose massive obstacles for people because they really miss their beloved ones and leads to
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 in
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concentration
 on
studies
.
For instance
, a friend of mine from India
discontunied
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discontinued
 his
studies
 in the USA because he cannot stay away from his parents for a longer period of time and
leter
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later
this
 affected his career.
Finally
, international
students
 have a drawback of missing their family because of the loneliness and lack of support from their friends. To conclude, studying
abroard
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abroad
 is the latest trend in many
countriues
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countries
. While
students
 will no doubt experience
home sick
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homesick
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 but one who can overcome that lead to the main advantage of studying abroad is learning a new language. Ultimately the
eexperience
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experience
 of studying abroad has more advantages than disadvantages.
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