Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Television

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is considered an important

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median

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medium

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through which

children

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can be educated.

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, there are certain sections of society that agree and disagree with

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essay. On one hand, the

television

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helps presents topics to

children

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in a more engaging manner, thereby

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piquing

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their interest to learn. On some occasions, learning from a book does not have the same effect as actually visually watching the process unfold. An example of

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would be how to explain the process of photosynthesis to

children

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there is enough reading material to explain

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process, the concept of it will still elude some

children

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, through watching cartoons,

children

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can understand the important social cues

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expected of them, as these are discussed in an entertaining way. It is

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known that young

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can

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benefit from

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because they will have a quicker grasp on things

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the

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alphabets

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, nursery rhymes and counting, which will help them when they start kindergarten.

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, the popular kids show Sesame Street, is mainly aimed

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small

children

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to educate them on things like alphabets, nursery rhymes and counting, the importance of sharing and caring etc. Alternately, many

parents

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believe

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will not help, because it will create a dependency amongst the

children

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to always watch the

television

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. With the changing landscape of today’s world,

parents

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feel that their

children

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may be bombarded with images and details of things that they should not be made aware

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a young age.

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, the addiction to watching

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television

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may damage their eyes, resulting in them having to wear spectacles from a very young age, which poses a whole set of

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another problem

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

337 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

passive
sedentary
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creativity
imagination
educational content
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different cultures
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Children can learn effectively by watching television. Therefore they should be encouraged to watch television both at home and at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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