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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #information #research #business #world
Data correction is the most important thing in every industry. The details have a benefit to people in authorities and users in
term
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 of customer’s analysis and encouragement. Nowadays, insight info is used in public which sharers think that it will be advantages for the audients. Meanwhile, these may ruin the organization’s management and unexpected phenomena. The following paragraphs will discuss both views for the possible reason with the particular details. There are various useful
information
 and statistic which can be used to continue the researches effectively,
such
 as scientific, business and academic dissertations.
Firstly
, scientific data is
the
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realistic
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 which always come with accurate prove from the scientist. They have an experiment and results which is valuably and reliably.
In addition
, businesses have
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accumulated statistics which can increase their effectiveness.
For example
 sales volume for the
last
 decade can help
sales
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 and marketing team to reach the target for
this
 year plan easily.
Besides
, it is necessary for the educational system to have the fundamental info in order to analyze and develop the study plan. It can be seen that there are many good points for sharer and receiver.
On the other hand
, there are amount of papers
indicate
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 that there is confidential data, having risk on copyright issues and invaluable damages. Even though the scientific method has a reasonable result, there is some
information
that is
the
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top-secret in the laboratory which cannot announce in public.
Similarly
 to business and academic terms, some numbers will affect
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the economy and it is easy to imitate by competitors. The more they reveal, the more drawbacks happen. In conclusion, I personally believe that truth has never died. Disclosure of some real
information
 is the benefit.
However
, if that deep
information
have
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 not been approved by the authorities, it would be better to keep it secret.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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