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In many western countries there is an increasing number of couples choosing to have no children. What are the advantages and disadvantages to couples having no children?

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Many couples in the western part of the world, are choosing not to have
children
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, and whilst
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 poses certain levels of drawbacks, it
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 provides certain pros.
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 by many is considered a more selfish decision by many
people
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, whilst others see it as a personal choice and that everyone has the right to make
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 they need to know all that they are missing
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. On one hand, couples can focus on their careers, and take whatever steps necessary for personal growth concerning their work. With no
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, they have more time and funds available for themselves, thereby living their lives void of any other attachments and commitments.
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, you only need to focus your attention on the needs of your partner and nothing else. Alternately, the socially accepted norm, once
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 become a couple is to have
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.
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, couples without
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 often feel left out amongst their peers. Child-rearing is considered one of the crucial roles that a couple can be part of, and to miss out,
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 the eyes of others means that you are missing the most important episode of life.
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, not having
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, guarantees that when you are old, you will be alone having no one to take care of you. In conclusion, whilst many
people
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 in the western world are choosing not to have
children
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, the cons of
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 decision outweigh the pros, and often it can be considered a selfish commitment.
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, from the government's point of view, more
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 refusing to have
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 will result in a reduction in the population.
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