You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen (e.g., a washing machine or a fridge), but it stopped working after only two days. You called the shop, but they refused to help you. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: Describe the item you bought and when you bought it. Explain what the problem is. Tell the manager what you want them to do about the situation.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction towards the recent purchase I made from your shop. I bought a two-door fridge for my kitchen on 17 March.
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, I started to notice the problems just after a few days of use. The main issue is with the cooling vent; even if I set it at the highest level, it still operates at the lowest one.
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, food gets spoiled
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low cooling power.
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, I called the shop for help with
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problem, but they refused to help.
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made my
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experience with
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product really disappointing. I would really appreciate it if you could look into
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matter and provide me with a full refund or a better replacement with no additional charges. I am
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attaching the receipt for your reference. I hope
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matter is resolved promptly. Looking forward to your response. Yours sincerely, Darshan

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but you can add one more detail about when you called the shop and what they said.
task response
Task response: Your request is clear, but choose one main action first, like a refund or a new fridge.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but 'just after a few days' should be 'after only two days' to match the task better.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'because', and 'so' to make the flow even smoother.
task response
Task response: You clearly say what you bought, when you bought it, what the problem is, and what you want.
task response
Task response: The tone is polite and right for a letter to a manager.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea, so it is easy to read.
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