Has technology made the world better? We are increasingly shifting to computers in education, business, hospitals, crime detection etc. This dependency on computers is good or bad?

With the development of technology, there have been a lot of changes to our life. It is true that some of these changes are bad causing many social and environmental
problems
,
however
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most of the changes have made our life more convenient, and more comfortable.
For example
with the
invention
of an aeroplane, we can move to another country within some hours. And with the
invention
of the air conditioner, we can enjoy summer sitting in the room or travelling. The computer is a major
invention
in history.
Computers
are a great addition to our society, culture, and social structure. We are almost dependent on
computers
. There should be some alternatives in case of computer-related
problems
but
this
dependency on
computers
is good in the long run for certain reasons.
First
, we should analyze why we shift to
computers
. There are some works that were being done
also
before the
invention
of the computer but in a very slow way.
Computers
changed the way people used to do work.
Instead
of just being a place where people go, work is now something that they do. Another reason is that we are performing
such
kinds of tasks which we cannot even dream of without
computers
as: online information exchange --- online goods and services trading --- online digital content delivery --- electronic funds transfer and transaction processing --- accounts settlement --- online Sourcing. When
computers
became so common
then
there appeared some
problems
.
For example
, there is a lack of internet access facilities in
an
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urban areas. Eventually, they will go for an alternative and if the respondents have no alternative of
computers
then
it will create
problems
. Another thing is that common people have a lack of knowledge about
computers
. There are
also
security
problems
.
Then
there are hardware and software issues. There is a lack of law protection to online commerce. We can say that we should not so dependent on
computers
till the solving of
such
issues. When these
problems
would be solved even
then
we should have some alternatives in case of any problem due to which our routine work may cause hindrance.
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