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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents’ home once they finish school. They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples.

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It's a natural behaviour for most species to spend their childhood and adolescence with their
parents
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 and when they mature enough,
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 they would leave them and live independently as young adults. Since humans are no exception, they
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 tend to leave to start living on their own.
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, whether it is beneficial to take
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 action at an early age,
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 after graduation from school, has been debated. In my opinion,
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 it has certain negative effects, the advantages outweigh them. To commence with, let's consider self-efficacy which is of the utmost important skill anyone would need to be self-sustainable. One of the requirements to live independently is to be able to provide for yourself in order to cover the living costs
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 as accommodation and living expenses. In order to acquire
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 skill, one has to spend enough
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 working to gather both experience and enough savings to start a new life. Now if we take into account those who separate from their
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 after graduation, we can observe that they are forced to spend their
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 more effectively so that they can provide for themselves.
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, even if they have lived with roommates, they are still far ahead of their peers that lived the same period
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 their
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, they tend to have very high self-esteem which certainly would lead to successful careers. Another crucial skill is the ability to communicate effectively.
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 partly from schools, they tend to acquire it completely on a different level by spending so much
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 when they are living with strangers. Since they are used to interact with the same type of personalities at their home, who are likely to over-tolerate them, when they start living in a shared house it feels like a totally new world. They would have to learn to address problems and disputes in a manner to not insult.
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, after a certain amount of
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, they tend to easily cooperate with almost anyone because they can now extend their knowledge and apply it in new environments.
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 is a huge change with so many new responsibilities, the overall advantages are far more beneficial that enables us to live independently easier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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