«Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays,

people

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spend more money to enjoy their lifestyle rather than on necessary things. It is often believed that studying and dealing with infections has become pricey rather than taking preventive steps. In

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essay, I firmly believe that taking preventive measures is far better than infections diseases.

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of all, As the world is going through a pandemic period

people

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currently, are not taking any prevention regulations to stop the spread of the disease.

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nowadays, humans are actively taking part in numerous gatherings like

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, wedding ceremonies, government parades, and, parties.

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tends to spread the virus from one another.

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this

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people

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who are not taking a part in a healthy lifestyle, are more indulged in unpleasant activities.

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, the younger generation is more involved in awful activities like smoking, drinking, taking drugs, and, harsh driving which not only affects them but

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may ruin the lives of other innocent citizens.

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people

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are more cautious about the spread of the disease from mankind to others. so, they are taking necessary precautions to stay healthy life. Human beings are energetically doing exercise, yoga, eating a healthy diet and, boosting their immune system by taking natural foods, and, meditation. presently,

people

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are involving one another in various circular activities to make themselves enthusiastic and competitive with others.

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, the population now, are taking advantage of social media either by putting up the live classes for various age groups or else learning something by them. In conclusion, Everyone should competitively

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oneself in the activity which makes us fit and free from the diseases which affect our precious life. I, strongly believe in the Proverb which illustrates that"Health is wealth".

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«Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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