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«Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extend do you agree?

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Nowadays,
people
 spend more money to enjoy their lifestyle rather than on necessary things. It is often believed that studying and dealing with infections has become pricey rather than taking preventive steps. In
this
 essay, I firmly believe that taking preventive measures is far better than infections diseases.
First
 of all, As the world is going through a pandemic period
people
 currently, are not taking any prevention regulations to stop the spread of the disease.
Moreover
 nowadays, humans are actively taking part in numerous gatherings like
a cultural processions
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a cultural procession
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, wedding ceremonies, government parades, and, parties.
This
 tends to spread the virus from one another.
In addition
 to
this
,
people
 who are not taking a part in a healthy lifestyle, are more indulged in unpleasant activities.
For example
, the younger generation is more involved in awful activities like smoking, drinking, taking drugs, and, harsh driving which not only affects them but
also
 may ruin the lives of other innocent citizens.
on the other hand
,
people
 are more cautious about the spread of the disease from mankind to others. so, they are taking necessary precautions to stay healthy life. Human beings are energetically doing exercise, yoga, eating a healthy diet and, boosting their immune system by taking natural foods, and, meditation. presently,
people
 are involving one another in various circular activities to make themselves enthusiastic and competitive with others.
For instance
, the population now, are taking advantage of social media either by putting up the live classes for various age groups or else learning something by them. In conclusion, Everyone should competitively
enroll
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enrol
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 oneself in the activity which makes us fit and free from the diseases which affect our precious life. I, strongly believe in the Proverb which illustrates that"Health is wealth".
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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