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People in big cities are facing many healthy challenges due to a high level of air pollution. What cause air pollution in big cities? Can you suggest some ways to deal with this situation?

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Even after years of discussion and research,
air
pollution
 is still a topic of concern. There are various reasons that why people from highly developed cities are facing serious health-related issues and contaminated
air
 is
one
 of them . In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the possible causes of
air
pollution
, plus
also
 going to present some ideas to solve
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, the primary cause of
this
 issue is using personal automobiles on an everyday basis even for small tasks like dropping a children to school or buying groceries from the market. According to a survey conducted in 2016, folks from
India
, Brazil, Uganda use vehicles at least 6 times a day for five to six hours for household purposes and
this
 is
one
 of the reasons that Delhi from
India
 is
one
 of the most polluted cities in the world. People in big cities like to spend their days and nights while doing road trips without even realizing that they are harming our environment with poisonous gases which leads to
air
pollution
.
However
, it's not hard to control
this
 problem. There are some measures that we can take to solve
this
 issue and even the odd formula is
one
 of them. Even the odd formula is used by the government of
India
 in Delhi to control the
air
pollution
 as well as traffic and with the help of
this
 ,formula Delhi's
pollution
 level declined. I still remember when I was in
India
 every Monday, Wednesday and Friday vehicles with even numbers are allowed on the roads and cars with even numbers for the rest of the days. Plus, they
also
 encouraged people to use public transport
instead
 of personalized vehicles. In the
last
, I think with the right measures we humans can easily overcome any problem. If we really want to resolve
this
 issue we have to unite together and start focusing on using public transport which is not only cheap but a better option for all of us.
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